Throughout the
visit to LaGuardia archives, the class was given a brief overview of what
resources were available. The archives are a collection of private, primary
information. Primary and reliable information was available on the mayor Robert
F. Wagner. Valuable items suchs as the medals and pins mayor Robert F. Wagner received
were displayed on a wall by the bookshelves. A primary source that was provided
was the letter from Robert F. Wagner known as the “Remarks by Robert F. Mayor.”
Mr. Wagner was a democratic and liberal mayor that had been serving his third
term. In the letter, Mr. Wagner talks about how he was surprised to witness how
bad Harlem was doing. He took the time to see what the people of Harlem had
been going through. He wanted to address the major problems of poverty and unemployment.
As Mayor Wagner walked in Harlem, he saw debris of battle, boarded windows, and
residents that were in fear. Mayor Wagner supported the police because he knew it was
there job to protect the people. The sanitation department had lied to the Mayor
because he had been told that the debris of battle was cleaned up, when in
reality this was false.
Even though Wagner
supported African-Americans in Harlem and understood the hardships they were
facing, he still supported the police officers. I feel that he was trying too
hard to satisfy both the African-Americans of Harlem and the police. These are conflicting ideas to me because, African-Americans feared the police and felt hostility. Mayor
Wagner states, “Attacks upon the police, whose mission it is, to enforce law
and order, will not be condoned, or tolerated by me, at any time.” In essence, Mayor Wagner is saying that the police are doing their job in protecting people
and shlouldnt be harmed by the people of Harlem. He believed that the police was doing their job and was professional about it, when African-Americans felt otherwise.
Hey Adam.
ReplyDeleteI'm Evan a student for Prof. Roger-Cooper's ENG 220 class. I like what you put down for your "Archive" visit. Your observation is descriptive, but I feel that it's to short. You mention the medals and awards on the walls and he's ideas, but I think if you get into what he stood for, and keep the same compassion and understanding you have, to more of what YOU saw.
I feel that the comma's you use are a little much. Comma's are a breath and/or pause of an idea and something after the comma your supposed to back that up or add more. Cut down the comma's and use longer sentences to drag out your point. Making your response a less choppy. You mention the betrayal and lies the people of Harlem told the mayor, but what does that mean to you? Where did that come from? Where did he get the awards from?
Tell me where the quote was from, and how it was used (television, newsletter ect).
Your concluding sentences is great and very well written but just bring more into it and show how you feel and what you got from the visit.
Lastly, you shouldn't change anything, but just add more. Don't be afraid of using "and" for comma's.